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Golden Retriever

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A poem I made to dogs! :D


A made a song about the love and stuff of you and you're dog. =)

A Dog's Love.

A dog is desribed a man's best friend,
A dog will run, stretch, play, and bend.
You can teach them to sit, to run, and to lay,
A dog wants play with you all the wonderful day.

They may come and they may go,
They may have been high, they may have been low.
But what never leaves is your loved memories,
The great days when you both played in the leaves.

Your dog may be big, or it may be small.
It could be very short, or it could be so tall.
But no matter the size, you love each other
That fun you had with you, that dog and your brother!

And no matter how much your dog may be messy,
That dog has a heart, maybe as big as Lassie's.
That dog that you love, gone or here
You remember those days when you were so near.

You love that dog and he loves you too,
Those days there was so much love you felt like goo!
Your dog is so nice, so kind and so sweet.
That dog that you love, that fun in that summer heat.

That love is just priceless,
That love is so great.
Remember those berries you and your dog ate?
Oh how they gave you such a stomach ache!


That love is the best,
That love was better then all the rest.
That dog had that hair so fine, and so curled.
That love is the goodness thats runs through our world.

The love of you are your dog will never be broken.
That love you have will never be shoken.


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So, what did you think? :D Rate it 1/100 please!

-- Edited by Animal_Lover at 21:37, 2007-12-16

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10/10, since it was cute!

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Thanks. :]

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Anyone else? smile

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How com enobody else wants to post? :S I mean, the other ones, are posted onD:

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Very nice.
85/100

Here's why not so high. (lol i rymed..XD)
-shoke is not a word. :p
-some of the rhymes are a bit childish
-some random things just appear in places (berries)

I'd suggest taking your ryhmes apart, and re-wording it so it fits together better. ^^ You've got some great stuff. :)

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Nintendogsgal54 wrote:

Very nice.
85/100

Here's why not so high. (lol i rymed..XD)
-shoke is not a word. :p
-some of the rhymes are a bit childish
-some random things just appear in places (berries)

I'd suggest taking your ryhmes apart, and re-wording it so it fits together better. ^^ You've got some great stuff. :)



I completely agree with this.
It was very cute! ^^



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Ummmmmmm...thanks, I guess. :S :]

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I agree with Ngal.

XD It was funny. I laughed at the "goo" part and the "and your brother" part. XD
It was adorable, I love it. :]

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Heheh thanks! aww

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