you should write a real story.
a long one.
and make it easier to read.
and don't make the words colored to tell who said it, just write who said it.
like a real book.

WhiteCrow wrote:

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you should write a real story.
a long one.
and make it easier to read.
and don't make the words colored to tell who said it, just write who said it.
like a real book.

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huh? I didn't... On JBA? No. I like it that way, and I'll keep it that way. Stop critasizing, ok? GOSH. >_>

 

i wanted to be in it, but im changing my mind because your saying bad things about my friends...

Okay, new chapter!!!


Chapter 3: The fair!!!!!!!

JS: Hey! Where's my peanut? ='(
NG54: Why would you care about that at a time like this? We're going to the FAIR!!!! ^_^
H76: YAY! Do they have a person in a Hamtaro costume?
NG54: No. =)
H76: WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WKD: O_o So, anyways, when do we leave?
NG500: NOW!!!!! ^^
WKD: =D Yum!!! ... Oh wait...I mean, YAY!!!!
NG500: *Puts another peanut on plate.* I'm glad JS is in the bathroom looking for rum. =)
----------------*BAHM!!!!!!!!!
NG500: O_O *dies*
Nickie: You aren't allowed to die...Or kill in comedy's...O_O
NG54: O_O
H76: O__O
Val: O___O
IWN: O____O
L_P: O_____O
Bob: O______O
BB:O_______O
Everybody: O______________________________O
NG500: *Dead*
WKD: Uhh...
Sonic: Hia ppl!!!!
P_S: *GASP!!!!* OMGosh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! SONIC!!!!!!!!!!!! *chases till death*
WKD: Well, that leaves PS out of the comedy. O_o
Lucy (Chronicles of Narnia): This'll help. =) *uses that stuff thingy stuffy*
Valaskii101: Yay! I liek cereal!!!^_^
WKD: (She told me to say that. XD)
NG54: Well, I guess we can leave now.=) IWn, could you drive? Your 16.
IWN: Uhhhhh...I don't have a licence. =/
WKD: Well, you don't want someone like ME driving, do you?
*IWN immediately jumps in car to drive*
WKD: Whispers to Val and hammy: I'm actually expierienced...O_o
NG54: Okay then, let's leave. =)
*All jump into big limousine*

3 hou'a's later...

NG54: *asleep*
Nickie: *asleep*
Everybody: *SNOREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE*
IWN: Hey, look! Some else is actually o this road! =D
*Police pulls up, who happend to be the car*
Police: Exuse me, your going sorta slow...Can i see your licence?
IWN: O_O Uhhh...*Starts acting retarded*
Police: Retarded ppl shouldn't drive. O_O
IWN: *Makes retarded face and zooms car away*
Police: O_________O
WMP: Oh great...Wher are we going anyways???
IWN: Uhhh...O_O Uhhh...How 'bout disney?
NG54: *wakes up* Huh? Disney what? O.O
IWN: World. =)
NG54: THAT'LL TAKE HOURS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Val: Yeah! I definetly don't want tha--*falls asleep*
WKD: Amanda? O_O
Val: *wakes up* Nuhhhhhhhhhh...=B
WKD: O.O
NG54: SO, what do we eat???
*Jack in the back* Jack: RUM!!!!!!!!! Can we have rum?
*out in the middle of nowhere*
NG54: JACK?!?!?!? GET OFF! >=(
Jack: NO!!! >=D
IWN: *throws Jack out the window* =) Hope that took care of...That. =D
Bob: So, what DO we eat? Bananas?                                                        Val: CEREAL!!!!! OR COOKIES!!!! OR KOOLADE!!!
IWN: No, Amanda. We'll go to...O_O *looks around* Anybody know where we are? O________O
NG500: I do!!!
IWN: really? =D where?
NG500: ON A COOKIE!!!!
VAL: I LIKE COOKIES!!! *jumps out window to eat cookie ground, wich is really dirt* EWW! Yuck!
IWN: *Laughs* *pulls over and pick up Amanda*
NG54: This might be the end of our lives. >_>
IWN: How?
NG54: First of all, we don't know where we are. Second of all, you don't have a drivers licence. Third of all, you don't have a cellphone.
IWN: Yes, I do!!! =B
Everybody: *jaw drops*
*They're actually just asleep 'cuse the car wouldn't start after a few yards. They're in NG54's back yard. *
Everybody wakes up: Hey! I had a wierd dream!!
NG54: What was it 'bout?
*They all talk and are suprized they had the same dream*
And that's the end.
Camera guy: O_o And I have no say in this??!?!?!?
Narrorator: This was a dream. You can't tape that.
Camera guy: How do you know? ^_-
THE END OF CHAPTER ONE...Or is it?

Jack: Nooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *still stuck in dream*

DUNDUNDUN!!!!!

-- Edited by winkydoodles at 00:09, 2007-06-15