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~* Sapphire Eyes *~ Chapter Three Up!

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RE: Sapphire Eyes

CollarGirl · OMGJONASSISTERS

*past chapters*

Chapter One
Visions

   Lizzie reminds me of a curious butterfly, bright but troublemaking. She is a feisty young thing, but such a lover at that. Her lively, cheerful attitude makes my grin grow, and she and Fern get along nicely. I see them playing sometimes. They chase rabbits (although theyve never caught one), they flip rocks to see the underground world, and they bounce around like jumpy toads. Storm races after the two sisters, trying to catch their attention. Then I watch them all dash away into the forest. I miss those days.
            Where did they go? Where is my family hiding?
            I wish that day never happened. That dreadful, dreary day. The day I got separated from my youngsters and Jaye. I remember it clearly. But I want it washed away.
    Sadness sweeps over me as I have a brief flashback.
    I am sitting in the meadow near the woods. My pups are scattered around me, and my chin is rested on Jayes soft head. It is sprinkling outside, and my fur is damp. Suddenly, I hear a gunshot, and a hunter gets in view. I jump up and gently pick up Lizzie in my jaws. She sways, but remains unharmed. Jaye throws Fern onto his back and retrieves Storm. We all bolt away as a pack. We think we are safe.

            The vision is too clear to picture. Too awful and horrible to think about. I lie down and paw at a bright red leaf. It rustles lightly, and I flick it. The leaf tumbles away behind a tree. The annoying hum of the air drones on. I hear the air. It is loud as a mouse, but soft as thunder. I keep quiet, and the vision continues.
             Another gunshot booms. They are surrounding us. Angry men with guns. Slowly, our families drift away as a hefty man corners Jaye, and I panic. Another man startles me and Lizzie drops out of my mouth. Yelping frantically, I leap over to my pup, who is finally awake, green eyes wide with terror. But the man grabs her before me. He is carrying her away. I am angry. Without thinking, I hurl myself at the man stealing my daughter and bite him hard. Lizzie is thrown from shock, and she lands near Jaye, and she quickly hitches a ride with him. Now I am scared.
             I shiver. This flashback always scares me. I am frightened and lonely. I wish Jaye and Lizzie and Storm and Fern were here to comfort me. All I want is to breathe in their deep scent again. But that is not possible when their location is a mystery.
            Life isnt fair. Nothing about life is fair. Its not fair I didnt get to see my pups grow up; its not fair I will probably never see my mate again. Nothings fair. But thats the way things are, and you just have to deal with it and move on. So I do. I cant change the past, so I leave the dreadful scene behind. The ending begs for me to reveal itself, but I keep quiet. Shh, ending. I do not want to hear you. I spat. The ending quits nagging me, and I curl up in the leaf pile and drift off to sleep. But now I am scared to dream.

Chapter Two
Storm
          I wake up. The night is quiet and peaceful. Suddenly there is a faint flash in the sky, and I realize it is pouring. My fur is soaked to the skin, and I am cold and hungry. Thunder cracks the sky and the quiet night, and now I am trembling from the wet rain. Holding my breath, my ears droop and I pelt out from under the tree, out into the fierce night, under the twinkling stars. Thunder drones out my thoughts; I cannot think.
          The storm continues as I dart over to a hollow tree. I go inside and curl up in its soft sod. It is spacious and roomy in the tree. There are bark pieces scattered across the soil, and little patches of grass randomly poking out. I try to sleep again, but the thunder is too loud and the lightning too bright. So I dream without sleeping.
          I remember Lizzies first rabbit she caught. It was a sunny day, and it was Lizzies first hunt. I remember instructing her, but she never succeeded. She had already scared off three fish and one chicken. I was starting to believe there was no hope, when suddenly; a quick flash of white fur caught my eye. I turned, and Lizzie was creeping up on a bunny. Silently praying this would be her time, I watched as Lizzie pounced swiftly and killed the rabbit with a quick blow. I remember celebrating with her, and how proud she was of her victory.

***

           It is late now. The storm is still going, but I do not care anymore. All I can think about is my family. I daydream at least thirty stories of what we all did. Then I run through them again so I do not forget them. I cant lose them.
            I am tired now. Slowly, I lower my head until it touches the soft dirt. I curl my gray paws up around my chin and drift off to sleep again.

           There are hunters around me. I am frightened at first, but then I see Jaye. Jaye! I yip excitedly and bound over to him. But a beefy man stops me and aims his gun directly at me. I screech to a halt. Meanwhile, Jaye escapes and dashes away, glancing at me worriedly. Then I see. The ending. The ending of the dreadful vision. It is haunting me. Go, Jaye, I force myself to say. I will find you. It hurts me deeply as I see him and my beloved children bolt away. The man pulls the trigger on his gun. A bullet pierces my side, and I drop.

***

       I wake up. The hunters are gone. The first thing I notice is a large gash in my pelt with ruby red blood trickling out of it. Some is dried blood attached to my fur. But I do not worry about that. Jaye? I moan. No answer. Jaye! I yelp frantically. I hear no yips or howls. I told them to go. And they are gone.

       I jolt awake from my horrifying dream and shiver. The ending came anyways. The storm is over, but my head is whirling. I cannot get that vision out of my head. So I stay there and think about that horrible time, the calling and horror and sadness. And I bury my nose in the soil.

-- Edited by CollarGirl at 10:22, 2007-07-25

CollarGirl · OMGJONASSISTERS

Profiles:

Bella
Status: Main Character
Fur Color: smoky gray
Markings: paws whispy white as if stepped in paint; white dots near eyes
Eye Color: gleamy blue
Parents: Star and Flick
Mate: Jaye
Offspring: Lizzie, Storm, Fern
History: Her soul was created April 19th in the land of Amhula. Instantly, her parents knew this only child of theirs would somehow be special, unique. As soon as her paws touched the earth, bells chimed, and her mother and father immediately knew what to name this blessing. In their pack of Pakira, her parents had no extremely significant role, but they felt as though Bella should.

Later on though, Bella met Jaye, and they mated and borned three healthy young pups. But one day, in a ferocious battle, Bella's parents were killed. Bella greived for a time, and then thought evil of the pack. the other wolves tried to explain it was their time, a sacrifice, but Bella wouldn't listen. She took Jaye and her pups and fled, started their own small group. And her mystical creation is still a magical mystery to all.

Jaye
Status: Bella's mate
Fur Color: light black, almost a dark blue
Markings: a strip of white on tip of tail
Eye Color: glistening yellow
Mate: Bella
Offspring: Storm, Lizzie, Fern

Lizzie
Status: Jaye and Bella's firstborn pup
Fur Color: gray like her mother's
Markings: none in particular
Eye Color: green
Parents: Jaye and Bella

Storm
Status: Jaye and bell'a secondborn pup
Fur Color: dead black
Markings: none
Eye Color: yellow like Jaye's
Parents: Jaye and Bella

Fern
Status: lastborn pup of Jaye and Bella
Fur Color: steamy gray lighter than Bella's
Markings: white stripes on cheeks
Eye Color: turquoise, sometimes changes to pure blue
Parents: Jaye and Bella

-- Edited by CollarGirl at 14:13, 2007-07-03

CollarGirl · OMGJONASSISTERS

Fan Art

-- Edited by CollarGirl at 14:14, 2007-07-03

CollarGirl · OMGJONASSISTERS

RE: ~* Sapphire Eyes *~

RottyLover · Basset Hound

I didn't get a chance to read chapter one yet, but the prolouge is written very well, very interesting, too.

EDIT: Oh. My. Gosh. Wonderful writing. absolutly wonderful. Keep up the good work. Can't wait to see more.

EDIT 2: Also, I wanted to coment on the tense, you don't see a lot of stories, novels, anything written in present tense, because it's sometimes difficult to get a point across or you run into other difficulties, but you did a wonderful job. It flows very nicely, and it sounds wonderful. Fantastic job.

-- Edited by RottyLover at 21:16, 2007-06-30

-- Edited by RottyLover at 21:20, 2007-06-30

CollarGirl · OMGJONASSISTERS

RottyLover wrote:

I didn't get a chance to read chapter one yet, but the prolouge is written very well, very interesting, too.

EDIT: Oh. My. Gosh. Wonderful writing. absolutly wonderful. Keep up the good work. Can't wait to see more.

EDIT 2: Also, I wanted to coment on the tense, you don't see a lot of stories, novels, anything written in present tense, because it's sometimes difficult to get a point across or you run into other difficulties, but you did a wonderful job. It flows very nicely, and it sounds wonderful. Fantastic job.

-- Edited by RottyLover at 21:16, 2007-06-30

-- Edited by RottyLover at 21:20, 2007-06-30

Wow, thank you!:P BTW, that's excatly what I look for in feedback. That and suggestions, but forget about that unless you have any. I'm so glad you like it!

NOA_Andy · Shibu Inu

I love it..it's amazing, and easy to follow...alot of stories I read that jump from the past to the present are hard to follow, but I think it's easy to see where you are with the story! Nice job!

-- Edited by PuppyCat614 at 19:22, 2007-07-02

CollarGirl · OMGJONASSISTERS

THanks a bunch Puppycat! Glad you like it!